求帮忙修改英语作文,希望可以修改错误和润色,谢谢
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时间：2023-09-09 18:53
With
the
development
of
the
times
(随着时代的发展应该是With
the
development
of
time,),
chatting
online
has
become
an
indispensable
part
of
our
daily
life,
especially
with
(这里介词应用for)college
students.
As
one
of
my
most
meaningful
experiences,
chatting
online
has
brought
a
lot
of
benefits
to
my
life.
For
one
thing,
it
provides
us
a
convenient
and
efficient
method
to
contact
our
friends,
let
us
even
thousands
of
miles
away
can
also
keep
in
touch(改为and
we
can
easily
keep
in
touch
no
matter
how
great
the
distance
between
us).
Unlike
the
telephone,
we
have
to
have
a
mobile
phone
each
other
can
we
have
a
talk(改为we
can
only
start
a
conversation
by
holding
a
moblephone
in
hand)
,
and
the
worst
thing
is
that
we
can
only
talk
with
one
person
each
time.
Chatting
online
can
offer
me
much
opportunity(more
oppotunities
)
to
talk
with
several
friends
at
the
same
time.
For
another
reason,
chatting
online
can
help
us
make
friends
from
the
entire
world
as
many
as
we
can.
Also,(改成in
the
meantime)
it
can
save
our
time
and
money
and
practice
our
comminuting
skill.(改成time
and
money
is
necessarily
saved
and
we
can
practice
our
comminuting
skill
in
the
process.)
Though
(通过吧?through)chatting
online,
I
have
more
chances
to
make
new
friends
who
can
help
me
and
(+we
can
)exchange
our
ideas
and
learn
more
from
each
other.
And
the
most
critical
result
of
chatting
online
is
that
we
can
share
our
mood
with
our
friends
at
any
time,
any
place
without
the
worry
about
the
embarrassment
which
may
happen
in
face
to
face
talk.(in
a
face-to-face
talk)
Now
I
tend
to
chat
online
in
English,
which
can
promote
our(改成my，不然和前面的I不搭)
spoken
English.
In
short,
there
is
not
anything
in
my
life
that
is
more
beneficial
than
chatting
online
if
we(I)
can
arrange
the
reasonable
time
on
the
network.
楼主写的很好，我只是稍加润色
